Kay Okan its really long

Main Information
Basic Character Information:
Name:Kay Okan
Age:27
Gender:Male
Clan:None

Looks:
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He wears a Jounin vest with a bandanna headband. It is backwards. He chews on wheat because it stops him from smoking. He also has his hair coming down the sides and the back of the bandanna. He has jounin pants and jounin shoes. His shoes have extra grip at the bottom the grip is black. His forehand protector is pointed backwards.
His hair is a jet black and its straight. His skin tone is a nice white. A little litter than Asuma's and alittle darker than Kakashi's. His eyes are a deep green and his other eye is a white then his pupil is black. If he activates his Mira Bora eyes they turn opposite;
His pupil turns white and the rest turns black. His teeth are clear. you cant almost perfectly see right through them. Under his Bandanna is somewhat like a spandex. It goes through his right side where his Mira Bora eye is at and it covers his eyes. All most like kakashi but its goes right down the middle. You cant see through it but I can
His Left side of his face is extremely handsome. His other side you cant see only the outline of his nose and eyes. People think its the same and he only wears it to look cool
Personality:
Kay is a very laid back person. He's very funny and always makes jokes and remarks.
He's very active and outgoing. He is intelligent and very elite. He's very good at what he does. He never shares his past. He always looks at the positives if he gets in trouble. He is also called the "Glass Demon". He is almost never serious. When he was in the academy he always was a 'smartass'. Even when he is in combat he makes smart remarks and comments. If someone makes fun of him he just goes and makes fun of them back.
He has a very loud mouth and will tell almost any secret of his really bored. When he was younger he all ways used to get in trouble for talking to much.
That is what made him so popular though. He was good to be around with.
Hes an Aries. He was born in March.

Kekki Gekkei
Basic Clan Information
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Other Information
Skill and Rank Information
Village:Leaf
Rank:Jounin

Special Characteristics:Has Mira Bora eyes
Special Effects:

Elements:Fire Wind
Skills Specialties:Genjutsu

Mira Bora Jutsus

Name:Naiseo no jutsu -
Rank:b
Skill:ninjutsu/kekkei genkai
Element:N/A
Description:The caster will have glass flow through their eye and they will shoot the glass at the moment making the blood seem like red jets.These jets can piere through stone and their movement can be manipulated separately by the user.

Name:Mira Bosho Shi
Rank: -
Note: Special Bloodline Technique
Range: Close (0m ~ 5m)
Magen • Kyouten Chiten is a Genjutsu technique unique to the Mira bora holders. Using the copy and counter functions of the Mira bora eye, the Naisei clan member can stop the sensory spell cast on their body and reverse it back on their opponent.

Name:shinshi fak no jutsu
Rank:A
Element:N/A
Description:After performing needed handsigns the user will link his mind with the minds of others this allows the user to exchange information with others around the world.When the minds are linked they will be thrown into a world where it only is white in the area.The people linked can create things like chairs, desk etc. while linked as it isn't reality.To do this jutsu the person casting the jutsu must be in a meditating state.This jutsu makes it easy to make plans with others withought being in the same area.

Name: Masayume no jutsu
Rank:B
Element:N/A
Description:This jutsu is can only be used when the opponent is asleep or very sleepy, and the user must stay in stationary and focused to keep the jutsu active.The Ouroboros eye will begin to glow brightly and begin to spin.The user will be able to control the dreams of people who are asleep.While controlling the dreams the people affected cannot wake up unless the user's focus is broken or he chooses to stop the jutsu.While controlling the dreams the user has total control of every aspect of what happens in them.What makes this jutsu dangerous is that if the person caught in the dream dies they will be stuck comatose in their nightmare until the user chooses to release it or is killed.

Name:Hari no jutsu
Rank:S
Element:N/A
Description:These pieces of "glass" are used to attack the opponent and cause painful cuts to their body.The pieces of "glass are so small that they can be absorbed through the skin and can be inhaled through the nose or mouth.The glass will shred apart your insides if breathe in or absorbed through the skin.If the opponent breathes it in from the mouth or nose the opponents lungs will be shredded to ash and if inhaled through the nose it will cause the opponent to have a bloody nose.If The pieces of glass are thrown back at the user and it hits him/her it will not affect the user in any way it will only be absorbed back into the users body and turn back into it's original state.The user can control the body of a person in any way he wants that have had the pieces of "glass absorbed through their skin. This allows the user to pit comrades against each other or to assassinate someone from afar.The user can also create different shapes and objects allowing the user to create many helpful things in battle.This jutsu causes a great strain on the user as it takes a great amount of chakra to maintain.

name:NeiPein no jutsu -
Rank:S
Element:N/A
Description:the users Mira boru eye will begin to spin and the opponent caught will be sent into an almost unbreakable genjutsu.The opponent is found in the genjutsu trapped in a box of mirrors. The mirror start to burn off and rip the skin then it will gauge their eyes out but they could still see what is happening to them. It will use unbearable torture ways to make the opponent suffer.


History and RP Sample
History:
Some info you might want to know-
Kapo's dad died when he was young. He lived with his mom until she died when he went into the academy Kapo swore to became one of the strongest.
Academy Arc.:
When Kay was in the academy everyone hated him because he was so obnoxious. He always did pranks and no one thought he was serious enough to become a shinobi.
He always goofed off. He always did this to take his mind off of his parents. His parents died of poison both of them did. Everyone didn't like him. The hokage was getting ready to banish him. He sworn he would get better then thats when everyone liked him cause he started to love him. He was getting serious. He was a cute ninja. He was also very strong and talented. Everyone adorned him and he loved he attention. He loved he spotlight. Even though everyone else had a clan he was still a better learner then them. Even the boys liked him. He was like the popular like the Jock of the school. Nothing bad as ever happened to him. He said the right things, did the right things and was...perfect. He always did everything faster than anyone else.
Every time someone would bring up something about parents. Kay would just ignore it and bring up a new topic. Although Kay had no father he swore on his father’s grave that one day he would become hokage.

Genin Arc.:
Once Kay became a genin everyone did not want to be on his team. He was like naruto no one wanted him but he soon grow up to be best. No one wanted Kay to be on there team because everyone said he sucked. He did, He only passed with 2 points. He barley passed. When Kay got his headband he put it on backwards because he thought that he was always going to be a loser and he didn't deserve to be a shinobi. Kay was teamed up with a girl named Kire. Kire was very pretty Kay had a little crush on her. Then another boy named Jasen. He was very talented but very weak in bad situations. Our sensei named Kien. Kien was a master at genjutsu.
Our team was very supportive but never was the main team or the 'ideal' team.
Our sensei trained us very well. Mostly me though because he thought I was holding the team back of our full potential. He trained me in genjutsu. Although I was the worst he had faith in me. He wanted me to follow in his footsteps because we were almost the exact same, both our parents died. He trained me very well. Kien and me went on a mission by oursleves because we thought we didn't need Jasen and Kire, sadly we were wrong. We fought 3 special jounin from the mist village. As the battle went on we last 2 genjutsu user vs. 1 taijutsu, and 2 ninjutsu. We weakened the jounin very badly and called for help. When help arrived the it was almost to late. Kien was about to die. Before he died he wanted to give me something. He never told us but we had the Mira Bora eyes. Thats why he was so good. He only gave me one because of a ninjutsu paralyzed his other side. Kien give me his eye and then he died.
When I came back i told the Hokage, Jasen and Kire. The hokage was impressed because we still completed our mission. He then promoted me to chuunin without the chuunin exams.
Chuunin Arc.:
When i became chuunin i promised to be like Kien so i traveled to the Earth country with Kire. We were best friends. I went there so i could learn the jutsu of the Mira bora eyes. After almost 4 years there i became a master. I learned very quickly. I was motivated. We went back to the leaf village but Kire didn't she fell in love with someone in the earth.

Jounin Arc.:
When was always depressed cause the love of his life loved someone else. Kay went on and trained students. The one above normal skills. He was one of the best jounin
in the village.One time when we went out to a mission he got cut with a long sword.
The long sword almost crushed his left arm. Out of no where Jasen came out and saved his life. Jasen still lived though. We are best friends and we train our students togeather.


RP Sample:
Kay was walking through a grassland. The winds were very fast just like a normal grassland. There was no trees in sight at all. The plants were weaving left and right as Kay walked through them. While Kay was walking through them his finger was gently tipping the top of each plant. Kay's hair was flying backwards but his bandanna prevented it from going out of control. Kay did not have his jounin vest on at the time. Only his jounin pants, his sandals, his bandanna and his undershirt.
Kay started to run as fast as he could through the grassland. He ran so fast that the ground started to heat up against his sandals and created a wildfire. Kay turned around and saw the fire started to rise up. Since it was in a grassland climate it didn't help much. Kay took a deep gasp as he was surprised he could destroy the land by himself. "Mizuame Nabara" Kay said as he started to do some handseals. The water started to cover up the fire. The gases in the stickyness started to kill the fire. Then the fire ate it and grew even bigger. Kay looked down then back up with a big inhale.
"Mizu Animal Summoning!" he said as he exhaled "Kire!" Kay demanded. A big monster almost bigger than a wal-mart formed up out of fine air and then it turned into water.
Kay nodded at Kire and Kire nodded back. She knew what to do. She jumped onto the water and killed it instantly. Then was a long wave of water splashing everywhere but Kay made no movement. As the water all settled he nodded at the ground which was flooded and started to walk away.

Jutsu Name: Muon Satsujin Jutsu
Rank: A
Element:neutral
Description: The ability to commit a silent homicide, is a technique to dispatch your foe with no warning. Your quick speed and skills will instantly kill them before they can provide a defence.


Name :Shuriken Kage Bunshin no Jutsu - Shuriken Shadow Clone Technique
Rank :A
Element :N/A
Description :Shuriken Kage Bunshin no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that uses Kage Bunshin to create multiple physical clone copies from one thrown shuriken.

Name:Kokuangyou no Jutsu - Journey into Black Darkness Technique
Rank: A
Element:N/A
Kokuangyou no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique which causes the ninja's opponent to be enveloped in total darkness. While in the black void, the ninja will be unable to see any incoming attack or threat.

NameNehan Shouja no Jutsu - Temple of Nirvana Technique
Rank: A
Element:N/A
Description:Nehan Shouja no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique that allows the caster to place a large body of people into a unconscious state. The target can avoid the spell by forming and using the dispel skill.

B-Ranked
Name:Dai Endan
Element:Fire
Rank: B
Dai Endan is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire element. Jiraiya will first gather the fire into his mouth and then spew a giant breath of fire constantly at his opponent.

name:ookisa ayatsuri no jutsu(size manipulation tehcnique)
Rank:b
Element:N/A
Description:this ninjutsu allows the user to change the size, and mass of an obeject given the user the choice the choice of increasing size or decreasing size of the weapons or buildings etc.

NameMagen • Jubaku Satsu
Rank: B
Magen • Jubaku Satsu is a Genjutsu technique utilized by the Leaf Jounin Yuuhi Kurenai. After forming the needed hand seals, Kurenai will disappear and approach her target. Once near her target, a tree will grow at their feet and its branches will bind them so they can no longer move. Once the illusion makes them believe they are captured, Kurenai will appear from the tree itself and stab her target with a kunai.

NameShikon no Jutsu - Dead Soul Technique Character Use: Kabuto
Rank: B
Shikon no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique that uses a dead body to create the illusion of another living person. The ninja can either animate a normal dead person, or alter the appearance of the dead person to resemble another. To do the second version, the ninja first changes the appearance of the dead body to resemble the person to be portrayed. Then using this jutsu they make the heart beat again, allowing them to control the actions of the dead body.

NameShoushagan no Jutsu - Vanishing Facial Copy Technique
Rank: B
Shoushagan no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique used for spying. A dark technique, the jutsu involves the removal of the face of the person to be impersonated. By wearing their face and clothing, the ninja can impersonate the original without others being aware.

C-Ranked
NameOxygen Deficiency
Rank C
Description: The user by releasing their chakra out over the air currents traps their opponent in a minor Genjutsu, in which their opponent after some time believes themselves to be choking as the battle progresses, when in fact the chakra is interfering with their brain waves and making them not take as much air into their lungs as they usually would.




name interrogation technique
Rank: C
Hidden Rock ninja Kakkou used this Genjutsu interrogation technique its makes you say plans and secerts.

NameKori Shinchuu no Jutsu
Rank: C
Kori Shinchuu no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique which causes the target to travel around in circles. If the ninja is unable to detect the illusion very quickly, they can become exhausted mentally and physically when they are unable to reach their desired target by traveling along the same path over and over.


NameMagen • Jigoku Gouka no Jutsu
Rank:C
Magen • Jigoku Gouka no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique that causes its target to see a vision of fire. After Yoroi forms the needed handseals, a huge ball of fire will descend from the sky to envelope his target. The victims of the genjutsu will believe they are being engulfed by a torrent of fire and flee their location for safety.

Name:Soushuuha - Manipulate Advancing Blades
Rank:c
Element:N/A
Description:This technique allows the user to hover multiple shuriken in the air while he approaches a target. The technique allows a ninja to unleash a torrent of shuriken much more quickly than if each was thrown individually

Name:Housenka no Jutsu - Mythical Fire Phoenix Technique
Rank:C
Element:Fire
Description:Katon
• Housenka no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element.
The ninja does the necessary hand seals and then emits a series of
small fire balls. The ninja can also hurl a projectile which is covered
in these same flames. To the opponent the attack appears to be only the
balls of flame, they do not see the hidden threat within the flames.
Meaning that even if the flames are put out, the projectiles still
converge on the target. The flames can be used to cover different
projectiles like shuriken or kunai.

Name:Ryuuka no Jutsu - Dragon Fire Technique
Rank:C
Element:Fire
Description:Katon
• Ryuuka no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element.
After binding the opponent, the ninja uses a guide wire to unleash a
large torrential fire burst onto the target. This technique is used in
Conjunction with Windmill Shuriken attached to the Wire to bind the
enemy. The Shuriken can be controlled mid-air.

Name: Gouryuuka no Jutsu - Great Dragon Fire Technique
Rank: B
Element: Fire
Description:
Katon • Gouryuuka no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire
Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja will expel
dragon head fireballs at their opponent. These powerful fireballs can
punch through concrete. Instead of expelling multiple fireballs, the
user can also expel a single large dragon at the enemy. This helps
to concentrate the power of the attack.

Name: Goukakyuu no Jutsu - Great Fireball Technique
Rank: C
Element: Fire
Description:
Katon • Goukakyuu no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire
Element. The ninja does the necessary hand seals, draws chakra from
their mouth into their chest and them immediately exhales it. They then
blow a stream of fire which erupts into a large sphere of flames. To
better manage the flames the ninja will bring their hand to their mouth
to control it.

Name:Great Fireball
Rank:B
Element:Fire
Description:Dai Endan is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire element. Jiraiya will first gather the fire into his mouth and then spew a giant breath of fire constantly at his opponent.

Name:Fireball
Rank:C
Element:Fire
Description[/b]:Katon • Endan is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Fire Element. This jutsu allows Jiraiya to emit a jet of fire from his mouth.

NameReppushou - Gale Wind Palm =
Rank: C
Fuuton • Reppushou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Wind Element. After forming the needed hand seals, Nagato will send a strong gust of wind towards his target. When acting in conjunction with another thrown weapon, the wind can increase its power and deadliness.


NameDai Kamaitachi - Great Cutting Whirlwind
Rank: B
Dai Kamaitachi is a Ninjutsu technique developed by the Sand ninja Temari. Named after a mythical creature, Temari uses her fan to blow a concussive wind that is imbued with her chakra. This technique is a bigger version of the normal Kamaitachi no Jutsu, having the ability to cause a great amount of cutting damage to the nearby area.



Jutsu Name: Daitoppa - Great Breakthrough
Rank: C
DescriptionFuuton • Daitoppa is a Ninjutsu technique which utilizes the Wind Element. After bringing his hand to his mouth, Orochimaru will blow a large blast of wind capable of leveling almost anything in its way. A variation of the technique involves a smaller blast of wind which gets ignited with flame.

NameKamaitachi - Cutting Whirlwind
Rank: C
Kamaitachi is a Ninjutsu technique developed by the Sand ninja Temari. Named after a mythical creature, Temari uses her fan to blow a concussive wind that is imbued with her chakra. When her opponent is caught in the wind, a tornado will raise them into the air and hold them with the chakra. The wind will then begin to cut the target with the sickling winds.

NameKaze no Yaiba - Sword of Wind
Rank: A
Kaze no Yaiba is a Ninjutsu technique utilized by the Sand ninja Baki. After forming the needed hand seal, a cutting whirlwind will envelop his opponent and cut them to pieces. Unlike a real sword which can face resistance, the wind blade will be able to slice with little difficulty.


NameReppushou - Gale Wind Palm
Rank: C
Fuuton • Reppushou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Wind Element. After forming the needed hand seals, Nagato will send a strong gust of wind towards his target. When acting in conjunction with another thrown weapon, the wind can increase its power and deadliness.

NameFuuton - Kyuomou-kaze no jutsu(Fierce wind)
Rank- B
Utilizing the wind element the user will release a gust of wind. In the shape of an hawk flying towards the victim. The force of the wind is able to knock an opponent a couple feet back off the ground. And send them flying through the air and crashing. Into the ground, tree or fall depending on the landscape.

NameFuuton- Kobura-kaze no jutsu(Wind serpent)
Rank- C
Using the wind element, the users will release what looks like a serpent. Made strictly from wind the serpent carries numerous small wind blades. That are able to slice the opponent. Causing a lot of damage, should the victim get caught swallowed up by the serpent.

NameFuuton- Sankobura-Kaze no jutsu (Triple wind serpent)
Rank-B
Like the wind serpent jutsu, the user will release 3 wind serpent instead of one. This particular jutsu is to increase the users chances of a direct hit. It carries the same effects like the Kobura kaze jutsu. Except, if the opponent gets hit by the 3 wind serpent. The damage will be tripled.

NameFuuton- Kazeken no jutsu (Wind sphere)
Rank-A
Using the wind element, the user will build up a wind sphere around them. The wind sphere around the user spins at high speed. Deflecting incoming attacks. It is used for defensive purposes.

NameFuuton- Butouha katta no jutsu (dancing leaf cutter)
Rank-C
Utilizing the wind element. The user will use a combination of leaves and wind. In order to make the leaves sharper. The user then send out a strong gust of wind. In which the leaves will travel with. And on contact the leaves will slice and dice the victim. If the opponent get caught inside of it.

[b]D-Ranked[/b]

[b]Name[/b]: Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Replacement Technique)
[b]Rank[/b]: E
[b]Description[/b]:This jutsu lets the user quickly switch places with another nearby object, such as a plant (normally a section of a log), an animal, or even another person within reach, leaving the opponent open to a counter-attack. Explosive tags can be attached to the replacement for an added surprise, which Sasuke has done twice in the anime. Fundamentally, all ninja know this technique.
The anime has a number of other objects being used for this jutsu, such as a boulder, mud, a scarecrow, and even a large rolled-up carpet. These items are usually nowhere in sight, suggesting that they are merely gags meant to lighten up the situation and not an actual part of the jutsu. Additionally, the normal practice of switching places with a section of log is done in several places that have no such thing anywhere nearby.


[b]Name[/b]: Shunshin no Jutsu (Body Flicker Technique)
[b]Rank[/b]: D
[b]Description[/b]:This jutsu is a high-speed movement technique, allowing a ninja to move short distances at an almost untraceable speed. To an observer, it appears as if the user has teleported. A puff of smoke is occasionally used to disguise the user's movements. It is accomplished by using chakra to temporarily boost the user's reflexes. The amount of chakra required depends on the overall distance between the user and their intended destination.

[b]Name[/b]: Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique)
[b]Rank[/b]: E
[b]Element[/b]: None
[b]Description[/b]: This jutsu allows the user to assume the appearance of another person, animal, or object. This is one of the basic jutsu taught at the Konoha Ninja Academy. Fundamentally, all ninja know this jutsu

[b]Name[/b]: Bunshin no Jutsu (Clone Technique)
[b]Rank[/b]: E
[b]Element[/b]: None
[b]Description[/b]: This technique creates intangible clones of the user. The clones are simply illusions and will dissipate when they come into contact with something. The illusions can be seen through by the Byakugan and the Sharingan. A person with normal eyes can also distinguish the clones from the original, since the clones will not disrupt the area around themselves with their movement (won't kick up dust, crush grass, etc.).

[b]Name[/b]:Kai - Release
[b]Rank[/b]: D
[b]Element[/b]: None
[b]Description[/b]: Kai is a Ninjutsu technique which allows the ninja to avoid the effects of a Genjutsu illusion. After forming the needed hand seals, the Genjutsu technique will not affect the ninja. The ninja can also use the technique on another individual who was unable to avoid the attack. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja touches the one affected to end the affect of the spell

[b]Name[/b]Kasumi Juusha no Jutsu
[b]Rank[/b]: D
Kasumi Juusha no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique that creates false attackers to delay and confuse the enemy. Though these servants are not real, the actual ninja is able to remain hidden and throw kunai and shuriken matching the movements of the servants. This makes it appear the false servants are capable of attacking. When the enemy attempts to attack the servant, they will merely disrupt the servants illusion body but not destroy it.

[b]Name[/b]Kokohi no Jutsu
[b]Rank[/b]: D
Kokohi no Jutsu is a simple Genjutsu technique which changes the appearance of a nearby object

[b]Name[/b]Magen • Narakumi no Jutsu
[b]Rank[/b]: D
Magen • Narakumi no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique that causes its target to see a horrifying vision. The ninja will use the serpent hand seal to cause a circle of leaves to spin and envelop the target and then fall away. Once cast the world will appear normal to the target until they see the illusion.

[b]Name[/b]Magen • Jigoku Gouka no Jutsu
[b]Rank[/b]:D
Magen • Jigoku Gouka no Jutsu is a Genjutsu technique that causes its target to see a vision of fire. After Yoroi forms the needed handseals, a huge ball of fire will descend from the sky to envelope his target. The victims of the genjutsu will believe they are being engulfed by a torrent of fire and flee their location for safety.

[b]Name[/b]:Nawanuke no Jutsu - Escaping Skill
[b]Rank[/b]:e
[b]Element[/b]:N/A
[b]Description[/b]:a very basic Ninjutsu technique that allows a ninja to escape from rope binds.
[b]Name[/b]:Cloak Of Invisibility Technique
[b]Rank[/b]:E
[b]Element[/b]:N/A
[b]Description[/b]:With this jutsu one uses a cloak or piece of cloth to make oneself blend in with the background, rendering oneself invisible.

[b]Name[/b]Kinobori no Waza - Act of Tree Climbing
[b]Rank[/b]: -
Kinobori no Waza, the art of tree climbing serves a dual purpose. Taking part in Kinobori Shugyou (Tree Climbing Training) helps a ninja learn how to focus their chakra. It also teaches the ninja how to run up trees and walk on vertical walls. The training helps the ninja learn how to focus just the right amount of chakra to a particular part of their body. The amount needed to climb is small but it must be precise. The feet are regarded as the hardest location to master chakra focusing. So by gaining the art of this skill, the ninja will have any jutsu available (theoretically) because they will be able to focus their chakra as needed


[b]Name[/b]Suimen Hokou no Waza - Act of Water Surface Walking
[b]Rank[/b]: -
A variation on the Kinobori no Waza (Act of Tree Climbing), the art of water surface walking allows a ninja to walk on water as if it was a solid surface. Focusing an even amount of chakra out of the soles of their feet, they can balance themselves on the very surface of the water. But there is a small catch. Unlike on a tree, when walking on water, the surface depth and density changes constantly. So a flow of chakra that can be varied at any time must be maintained. This helps in getting the ability to master Chakra control.[/b]

o__o Mkay...
#1. Take everything out of spoilers its quite annoying to look through not to mention nothing is in half of them.
You need more history.
No Looks.
No Personality.

Work on your grammar and spelling.
Add detail EVERYWHERE.

You can't start as a Village Councilman.

Okay i fixed it
i fixed everything

Please, go to:

http://www.leafninja.com/ninjutsu.php

http://www.leafninja.com/genjutsu.php

http://www.leafninja.com/taijutsu.php

and other links for the leafninja site for the jutsu and techniques.

PLEASE put names in, if you would. ~

Zane-kun. ~
BtS staff. ~

Youre history doesn't match your age. Fix it if you will.

Add more detail as well in personality, looks and history.

Some of those jutsus are created
and i figured if i had them here they could be approved
so i won't have to post 324678 posts

i put names on my jutsus

Need to be 20+ to be Jounin.
Need less jutsu if your that Young.
Your RP is from another site, please use one that you made right on this site right now.

Thats my RP sample that was on the other site
and fixed everything else

i know, but, I need one that you just made now. I'll let the other mods finish it after this post.

Okay i made another RP sample

Change your rank; this application isn't worthy of jounin~
I want more personality, history, looks, I want it organized better. Bold subtitles and normal titles so I don't feel like I'm looking at a blob of words. I won't even glance at jutsu.

Clean this application up please; you would not hand this in to a business company in hopes of getting a position, and you won't hand something like this in here for such a rank.

I fixed it abit
took some jutsus out and added some
soooooo is it good?